Sentence grammar and structure, we will glance at those together since they really have to do using the mechanics associated with essay.

After which it picks up body paragraph number 2 aided by the reference the exact same paths, says ‘what might not brighten those paths is free tutoring.’ So in the place of likely to those canned transitions like, ‘on the other side’ or ‘now I’m going to share with you’ it simply hits this idea this reference to these paths. To ensure that’s an extremely strong transition that is natural really strengthens the corporation regarding the essay.
The really solid thing that this essay does is offer a lot of sentence variety. In the event that you remember returning to the bonus materials, there is a sentence variety chart that I gave you that I said you could utilize to kind of chart your sentence variety, the things I’ve carried out in the bonus materials because of this essay is chart the sentence variety of one of several body paragraphs. And you may see by taking a look at the various types as well as the different lengths of sentences that this really has a flow that is great there’s a lot of variety there. Additionally this essay uses an advance vocabulary but it’s not only advanced, it really is used appropriately. So here the example is, ‘Free tutoring doesn’t aim in the middle associated with the problems schools that are facing a wider variety of classes does by livening interest in school up until graduation.’ Therefore we’ve just seen an advance sentence structure and an advance utilization of vocabulary quite strong language that is commendable. These are all the reasons why this essay earned an 11 which can be for which you desire to be, ideally scoring ten to 12 in the ACT writing.

Now let us take a look at sample essay number 2.

Go ahead and go right to the bonus materials and print it out. Again I’m going to focus on reading the first paragraph however it may be important for you really to have a hard copy on front of one to follow along. Alright, that one starts with ‘a problem that is major many high schools face is students failing woefully to graduate, or dropping out before they have the possibility. High schools over the nation have attempted countless programs that are different ways to try to combat student’s failure, some proving more productive than the others. A aspire to learn and remain in school, something which not only getting help can perform. in my opinion, offering a wider number of class options would do a more satisfactory job of promoting success than merely offering free tutoring because ‘interest’ promotes’ and this one starts out quite similar to essay number one however, if you noticed this 1 only scored a seven. So it is still in the top half but a far cry through the 11 that the very first essay scored. Here we’ve got again a very strong position and comprehension of the task. This writer says ‘offering a wider variety of class options would do a better job of promoting student success and merely offering tutoring that is free the interest promotes the desire to learn and remain in school.’ Therefore we’ve got a posture, we have reason, in addition we have the introduction of a counter argument. You could already infer even they would have scored much higher on the essay if you haven’t read the essay from this that this writer must not do a good job of incorporating and powering up on that counter argument otherwise. So solid ‘task and position’ why legit don’t we see where it falls a little bit short.
‘Complexity and development’ alright this writer says, ‘My twelfth grade really helps many students by offering peer tutors because learning from peers is more appealing than being re-taught by adults. ‘tutoring helps many who could be too frustrated I notice when I read this is the wording is a little bit confusing here and I’m not really sure what this is supposing because, honestly it’s making tutoring sound like a really good thing that they cannot understand their classes and want to drop out.’ Now the first thing. The career statement told me that this essay was going to be arguing for a wider selection of classes. Which means this may be an attempted counter argument, but where it falls short will it be doesn’t completely dismiss the counter claim, it leaves your reader wondering but what is this person proving. To ensure’s the first place that falls short in complexity and development. The essay also says, ‘Offering many courses ensures that students will still learn, yet have some fun and start to become less stressed.’ Now this really is within the second body paragraph and also this may be the very first time that the writer has introduced this notion of ‘having fun and becoming less stressed’ and it is really unclear where that links to the position that ‘a wider assortment of classes is better for learning.’ So it seems kind of unfocused when we’re referring to development and keeping it focused and supportive.
Finally in organization this essay is organized simply but effectively it really is sorts of predictable but that’s why it scores a seven and never very up on top of the scale which is in the 11. This essay says ‘In addition to more classes, having parents and teachers who care about students’ success, offering extra-curricular programs to boost an connection that is active the school, having assemblies and events to market school spirit and several other factors are all important in promoting success.’ Now these are really great ideas and definitely on topic, but one might expect to see these ideas introduced in the introduction and then followed through to in the essay. However once you learn where this paragraph arises from could be the conclusion and that is among the big no, no’s for the basic organization. That you don’t introduce new ideas in in conclusion because all it will is serve to confuse your reader. They aren’t something that you have mentioned and none of one’s support relates to it. Which means this is why this essay’s score is a bit that is little in organization.
‘Sentence structure and grammar.’ Alright this essay says, ‘Something that not help that is merely getting do.’ This is certainly one of the relative lines that really stuck out to me in reality it’s an element of the position statement that will be among those sentences that readers are actually focused in on, while you are given your thesis or your position, they need it to be clear. And also this wording is truly kind of confusing, I’m not sure what things are talking about, what the something is and it is just a little bit awkward. So again we have variety of this awkward utilization of language which will keep this essay down for the reason that range that is mid than shooting it as much as the higher range that displays a command of the language.
Alright the couple of pitfalls that this essay come across that people curently have talked about and also you wish to ensure you avoid. This essay makes ‘hasty generalizations’ the line, ‘only students with a desire to boost can benefit from such a program.’ Which is a jump that is big. Making sure that’s saying basically if I give tutoring to everybody if they do not whole heartedly wish to be there they’re going to flat out fail. And I also genuinely believe that’s a really big leap in flaw and logic. In addition gets a little bit wordy, ‘The most important, though, is a student’s want to learn and also to succeed;’ it just continues on and on about this. And lastly we talked relating to this ‘basic organization’ not merely do we have type of candid transitions like ‘in addition’ to and ‘furthermore’ but we talked about the introduction of the latest ideas into the conclusion which really throws the reader for a whip. So coming back to wrap all of it up the seven indicators that the readers will be looking for is your ‘understanding of the task,’ the ‘position’ you take, the ‘complexity’ with that you discuss the presssing issue, the ‘development’ or support you provide, the method that you organized your ideas after which how you deliver it with your ‘sentence and word choice’ and your ‘grammar.’
In this episode we’ve taken a glance at two essays, both were solid they scored into the top half but clearly we come across why essay one scored an 11 while essay two scored a seven.

So now you need to attack the ACT writing section, I know you’re going to do great that you guys have the tools and the information.